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Post by grainnerhuad on Jan 5, 2010 10:39:21 GMT -5
Dealing with the deceased is a course in frustration.
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Post by ecec333 on Jan 5, 2010 19:21:03 GMT -5
Why this perpetual death?
Over and over again I die
heart stops in the midst of a tune
sings a duet with kidneys, liver og lungs
yet it's only a short ditty, not an opera
no fake deaths like in "Tosca"
no, all of them fold themselves into nothing
that is, defeat and rotting flesh
over and over again, perpetually
until I shall sleep in green pastures
wake up, stretch my limbs and start living
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© EC
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Post by karlsie on Jan 9, 2010 23:06:58 GMT -5
I apologize, ecec333, for not getting to this before now. I read it when you first posted it and have been wanting to comment, but i was preparing for the weekly roll-over. You have a good sense of expression. I have been considering, and i have published poetry at Subversify, but my feelings are that in the case of short poems, i would like to see several attachments. My eye for aesthetics likes to see a well filled page. I want mood surrounding the poetry i read. A good technique is to arrange several poems around a central theme, idea or progression of thought. Your poem was very well-balanced and i think if you'd like to submit several poems to Subversify for a page, it would be well received.
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Post by grainnerhuad on Jan 21, 2010 16:12:44 GMT -5
ECEC333 has many many publishable writings which I would be more than happy to host she has only to submit them to us.
However I see this (correct me if I'm wrong) as more of a quick excersise on her part. It is as ever well crafted. Thank you for playing along.
I have a short in the cobwebs of my mind for this prompt which by the way I put up as a point of frustration at our own "Late" Mitchell Warren who didn't answer my question about prompts...but I digress, I need to get to my fiction portion of the brain soon or it shall start leaking into other areas of my life and that tends to get confusing.
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Post by karlsie on Jan 21, 2010 18:16:07 GMT -5
I've followed ecec333's work before, which is why i'm confident she could put up a great poetry page. I'm still working on my own prompt; hee hee. It started my newest Trapper John story, which i don't intend to put up until The Red Circle Hymn has run its last continuation, and i run a three part sci-fi serial by Astra. I apologize to all our fiction writers for the wait, but we're still in the process of trying to design our page so the fiction has as much prominence as our non-fiction.
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